You were correct. Grod will need to be entirely rewritten. I was committing the George RR Martin sin of far too many POV characters. Granted I only did it that way to mock him, but I still ran into the same problem he did.
I did not know Brer Rabbit used to be a spider. Spiders just don't seem as tricky as a rabbit. They're far more about order, in my mind (building webs, patience, using patterns etc). I'm kind of happy he's a happy go lucky rabbit rather than a nasty spider.
Not "clenched" above - "clutched"
If you ever decide to finish the Orc Sgt story or write fiction again, I am happy to copy edit to help it get done.
You were correct. Grod will need to be entirely rewritten. I was committing the George RR Martin sin of far too many POV characters. Granted I only did it that way to mock him, but I still ran into the same problem he did.
Good story, though. First orc character that *worked*
I did not know Brer Rabbit used to be a spider. Spiders just don't seem as tricky as a rabbit. They're far more about order, in my mind (building webs, patience, using patterns etc). I'm kind of happy he's a happy go lucky rabbit rather than a nasty spider.